Monday, September 30, 2013

Kernel of Insight: Pie in the face at a funeral



Pretty sure I won't be finished with the revising of my newest chapter this week, so I've got another Kernel of Insight to share.  This is a look into the initial genre of my book and how it rapidly changed over the course of my writing.

            Here's something you may not know.  At first, this series was meant to be half drama half comedy.  No, I'm serious.  Some of those aspects still show through, with the ribbing done by characters on traits they have, but this feels more familial, like old friends or family giving each other shit because they've got that level of comfort established.  But, when I started the drafts it was much more pronounced.  For example, the first few drafts focused on Aeon, not Mina, and had him arriving in Gesthal, setting up a glamour, and causing it to snow just because he liked it.  It was a bit of somber tension, as this quiet, unearthly figure acted without restraint or fear of reprisal.  Then, he'd head inside to where his vassals were assembled and walk straight into a food fight.  The interesting thing about the different cast members is their contrasting personalities.  This could make for some great comedy, with Vincent being fastidious, but resigned to the insanity, Nerise being giddily accepting of it due to her child-like nature, Deminos being hot headed, especially about his build, Gadius being snide and elitist, while still womanizing, Yuka being independent with a bit of a mutually abusive relationship with Merkel, where he verbally abused him and she would physically tease him, by doing things like dropping a pie on his face.  Looking back, it was kind of surreal.  And Aeon was going to play the straight man to this.  It made for a very different series.

            However, once things started rolling, I realized two things.  One, I was not all that great at jokes.  Exposition?  Check.  Characterization?  Check.  Imagination?  Check.  Wit...ehhhh...hit and miss.  Sometimes hit and miss comedy in a fantasy series is great.  Terry Pratchett built the entire Discworld series on fantasy humor that is occasionally hit and miss.  The difference between our styles, however, is in wordplay and structure.  Oh, also that Terry Pratchett is a god amongst writers and I'm a neophyte seeking to tell a simple story.  Anyway, If you are going to have humor, you need to do it with words more than actions.  Visceral humor requires you to see it rather than read about it.  So a pie in the face on the page isn't as funny as a pie in the face in person.  And my humor in the book was largely visceral.  I know how to make wordplay, but I'm not as laissez faire with my writing in a book as I am when I make posts like this.  It tends to have a lot more structure and rely on characterization.  Now, this can go two ways.  You can go the ultra light hearted route, like Discworld, and just have people's characters kind of accept the absurdity around them and roll with the punches, keeping their core personalities intact while giving a great excuse to crack jokes, or you can be more realistic.  Real people don't crack jokes after nearly escaping death.  They go "HOLY CRAP, DID YOU JUST SEE THAT?!"  Or something similar.  That's the style of writing I eventually settled upon.

            The other realization I had was that structurally, I didn't like how busy the narrative was jumping back and forth.  I tend to like having a focal point in a story and just sticking with their perception of the world, allowing the audience to not have any knowledge they aren't supposed to.  For comedy, you kind of need a variety of perspectives, I think, in order to keep the audience with you.  I wanted to focus mainly on Aeon and Mina, but I eventually settled on wanting to focus on Mina because while Aeon may have been interesting, he was a reactive character.  He does have his own wishes and agenda, but Mina is the one who goes out and gets stuff done.  She's the one who wants to travel, to learn magic, to help others, etc.  So, I focused on her and the story slowly changed.  Instead of writing a comedy, I found myself writing an adventure.  A coming of age tale about someone who was out in the big bad world, but a tragedy forced them back, getting a chance to go back once again and see the wonders of all there was.  I do enjoy having the characters with a kernel of insight(HA!  Name drop!) about the absurdity of certain situations, which they can roll their eyes to or slap their foreheads, but I still think that's very human.  We all do that in real life, like when you read about a teenage Baptist calling Harry Potter demon worship.  It's like...really...really, guys?  That happens even in a fantasy world, so I just roll with it.

            But yep, this story was initially going to have a comedic bent interspersed with pitch dark drama.  In the end, I decided that wasn't what I wanted.  It was fine to have the drama, but make the story less of a comedy and more of an adventure.  You can have your funny moments, but they're in balance with the sad, or heartwarming, or serious moments.  It's all part of the trip we're on, so to speak.

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